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Introduction: Alpha Luna began publishing in an online way in January, 2005. At that time and by the end of 2005, chapter 1 had important differences with the 2009 re-edited version.
I must admit that when I started the comic, there were many things that I didn’t know about creation, development and scripting that would make the story something much better. Instead, I included many ideas that at the time seemed good, but later would become a problem.
Other included changes are related to artwork or “remake”, and details that played the needed role so the comic could have the format that I wanted and it wouldn’t look so… outdated with 4 years on its back. From now on, I hope that you enjoy the deleted scenes from Issue #1, though I don’t feel so proud of some things that, well, were changed for a reason.
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“Original Cover (2004)”: 5 years ago, when the comic was only a pile of sketches, failed comics and ideas I decided to choose to publish my comic in an online way. This cover was the second sketch (the first one can be seen here) of what become the Alpha Luna cover.
The drawing was pretty synthetic, and I hope that at least the “evolution” (mmm, damned word ruined by Dragon Ball the Movie… argh) can be noted on this and the following pages.
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1.- “The Monster-wolf”: Originally the wolf of the first pages’ dream had a more “evil” look, and to say the truth it was “ugly”. This shows that by the end of 2004, when I was preparing the werewolves story, the least thing I did was drawing a wolf! I put the first idea I had of what a creature with a lupine and evil look should be. Sadly its purpose wasn’t clear until later and it was very necessary to redraw it.
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2.- “Luna wakes up in her house”: The original draft was about Luna waking up in her house from the dream and asking herself about the reason for those visions. In addition to that she asks -aloud- about why she didn’t remember anything about her childhood. She also makes a reference about her hair -that she has long- and that would be more comfortable for her to cut it to avoid the school guys (??). As you can see, there was a lot of the “Mary Sue” complex (enthusiast writers will know what I’m talking about) and ideas that in the end didn’t contribute.
The mere fact that Luna appeared with long hair and that then she cuts it made the character not establishing her personality at all. The scene was sexy, nothing else. Then Luna had an attack that seemed to end in a transformation, when I tried to communicate the idea that her body had “awaken” to the changes. That’s the meaning of the words “I release you” from page 6 that were removed in the last edition.
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“The Mysterious werewolf”: After the previous scene we saw that a lycanthrope took in his hands something that glowed (collar?) and mentioned Luna. The scene originally was about Fang that was holding a Rune that would allow him to track down the Alpha. Why? How? Although the Rune itself does exist in the storyline (Chapter 2), with time I realized that it didn’t have any meaning that Fang knew about it, and neither it was used as a detector.
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4.- “Luna and Collie talk”: Luna went out from her house and in the news they mentioned the “chupacabras”, a creature from latin american folklore that I borrowed to explain the dead animals when in reality I wanted to pose the question to the reader (lycans!). Although the idea was good, the contribution was minimal and the idea didn’t end explaining completely in that first version. And then, when I had to present the characters and establish their personalities and their relationship, I ended with a dialog that was resumed in Collie wanting that Luna would have a date, what made Luna an unfortunate, lone and emo girl. Well… not exactly, but the truth is that it was a wasted space and from which I feel satisfied now that we see exactly how Luna and Collie met in the new version.
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5.- “Hector is a bad guy!”: When Fang appeared, Hector was a stereotype of a clumsy guy that had decided to bother the wrong guy. Not only he was a caricature of a character, but he also talked in an annoying way. I think that the most similar character was Brutus (from Popeye). But, by developing the story and sitting to write seriously things for the future, I saw that the character had more potential if I knew how to use it intelligently. In these pages there’s also omitted and changed dialogs, and you’ll see that the horse scene didn’t exist (it was only mentioned in a frame), something that was changed. Just like Fang’s appearance changed from those firsts drawings… argh.
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.- “Luna has a spiritual travel!”: Here’s when things got strange. I had the sudden idea that the Luna and Fang scenes would connect and that she, being the Alpha, would be able to see what was happening far from her. Why? I had supposed that Luna had powers “beyond sight” *ahem*, without a Lion-O sword, of course. Her astral shape… or Luna with “Eva suit” traveled there because of the Rune that Fang is holding. But how did this work? What for? One of the simplest reasons was so that Luna, later, would ask about werewolves… and that’s it. Truly, her travel and her vision didn’t tell her much about what was happening between Fang and Hector, and this made this scene something pointless. But… yeah, it was disguised fan-service that increased the web counter a lot >_>u. Luna got mad, check the last special page.
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7.- “Luna was an innocent girl!”: By introducing the character David, the relationship with Luna was exposed in a different way. Something had happened between them, implying that Luna didn’t forgive him for some incident that I hoped to explain in the future, and with that to make understand why Luna preferred to stay away from guys instead of looking for love. This was connected with the idea that, previously, Collie wanted that she looked for other guys instead of continue having a complex. But since Luna’s character changed to a more rebel and independent girl, the topics of “loves” and cheesy stuff were left over. In the new version, David only bothers Luna to cause a reaction in her. By the other hand, Luna’s drawing was a bit ugly in some panels.
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8.- “Legends change!”: In the park scene Collie finished a speech about the soul, feelings and blah blah blah that would be relevant later, when Luna should recover her conscience from wolf-girl to human. But I considered that the scene wasn’t extremely important since it’s the Rune (Chapter 2) what does that job in the end. As you can see, I removed a lot of cheesy stuff in the new edition.
When Collie goes in depth about the Anthera legends, the ideas –though similar- change to connect Luna’s dream and the werewolves topic. Originally, it’s due to the spiritual travel that Luna is focused in werewolves, but in the new version it’s only because of her recurrent dream.
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9.- “Extended ending!”: By the time of self-publishing the comic in the 52 page format I had to reduce it from the original 59 to 52. Although the previous ones were only “changes”, the ending/epilogue of chapter 1 had to be shortened. It was 4 pages long instead of 2 (after Luna howling). A complete page with Joe opening the door and encountering Wolf-Luna was eliminated, and the last one, edited. It was painful to do it since at the beginning of chapter 2 the scene was repeated but from Luna’s point of view (from inside the room), giving a three-dimensional aspect to everything. But in favour of the story, everything keeps working in the same way, and at the end everything is understood anyways. I’ll leave you these out of curiosity, though I must admit that in the second to last page and some panels the drawing was pretty bad, something that relieved me with the idea of removing the scene.
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